After my workshop I spent a lot of time reviewing my paper and deciding which argumentative approach I would like to take. Similar to my original paper (the very first draft before I posted to my blog) I argued in favor of teen pregnancy. The first time I tried this, the paper sounded like an overwhelming teenage rant. (Seriously, you could hear "We're Not Gonna Take It" playing in the back of your head as you read). I shifted the focus of this paper to discuss the importance of education in regard to teenage pregnancy. The majority of my argument stemmed from personal experience, arguing that my young age did not stop me from being able to deliver this baby, it was my education that allowed me to continue my work. This was, of course, followed up by outside sources that helped me to build credibility and enhance my argument.
Specific changes I made after the workshop:
-many students wanted to know the difference between an E.M.T. and a Paramedic
-people wanted some details of the actual childbirth. I found a good balance in including this information without getting too graphic.
- students asked that I include a little bit of my training/background as an E.M.T.
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